Real-time Collaborative Event Planner > Name the product in a way the reader (i.e. your target customers) will understand.
Everybody can streamline event planning processes with their friends > Describe who the market for the product is and what benefit they get. One sentence only underneath the title.
Allows for creation of an event, addition of users to event, ease in collaborative planning, and a module to view current statuses of the event > Give a summary of the product and the benefit. Assume the reader will not read anything else so make this paragraph good.
Quantity of decisions to plan events is cumbersome and usually ends up falling on one person, which discourages people from bearing the responsibilities. People who aren't as vocal may not voice their ideas or opinions > Describe the problem your product solves.
Streamlines the process of collaborative decision making > Describe how your product elegantly solves the problem.
We created this app to make collaborative event planning simple, making it easy to plan more events as well as providing a space for more voices to be heard. > A quote from a spokesperson in your company.
In just a couple clicks, create an collaborative space to plan an event with your friends > Describe how easy it is to get started.
"Life before King Of Pho was dull, monotonous, and no one in the office wanted to spend time together. After we started using King Of Pho, our office is closer than we've ever been. Every weekend, every NIGHT, there's something happening -- be it snowboarding, bowling, hiking, or just drinks. KING OF PHO IS GRRRRREAT."" > Provide a quote from a hypothetical customer that describes how they experienced the benefit.
Try it for yourself this weekend! > Wrap it up and give pointers where the reader should go next.